pendragon1
Member Since October 26, 2010
Taking Lisa's Virginity
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big_un1979
4992 days ago
pendragon1
5081 days ago
big_un1979
4992 days ago
pendragon1
5081 days ago
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You write reasonably well about the life and times of a scumbag. There is no finesse whatsoever to the story...
Best Friend Helps with Sis!
by
luv2likr
luv2likr
There are a few inconsistancies in this story, and it needs re-writing, as well as editing. For all that, it is a fair effort...
Cousin Cumming Of Age Pt 1
by
hrnytoad
hrnytoad
How on earth could you think that where you left off and a cliffhanger are the same thing, Finish your story, man...
Stepmom & Me, first storyyy. so plzz have mercy while rating
by
The Steantorian
The Steantorian
The other raters said most of that which needs saying...
Incest for two please
by
Yautja
Yautja
This story is, basically, good. However, it needs an extensive rewrite, making it longer, and fixing the spelling, grammar, capitals, and tense agreement...
Massage from sis!
by
Vaughan
Vaughan
This story needs, editing, proofreading, and revision. The premise is strong, however...
Mom fucks son for first time many times (fictional but good)
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breenlax5
breenlax5
The story could have been written by an illiterate ten-year-old
All I wanted to do was fuck the shit out of her...
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storieteller
storieteller
This is not about incest, it is about rape. It is not even well written. I find nothing redeemable about the story...
SHE WASN'T LYING.
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itsonlyfun
itsonlyfun
Great, great story. The dialect had me riveted, and placed me inside the story...
Strange questions
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Devilstale
Devilstale
What they said, plus I am going to assume that the errors in spelling are typos and careless, rather than mis-spellings...
MY SISTER OPENS MY EYES TO A WHOLE NEW WORLD
by
josephsmith1974@live.co.uk
josephsmith1974@live.co.uk
Few very minor grammatical errors, but the quality of the story far exceeds them...
Lisa
by
cecilia
cecilia
The plot is flawed, badly; there are no paragraphs; and the spelling and grammar leave a lot to be desired...
My sister Katie and our parents out on business
by
miked42393
miked42393
Simple story; it could have been much more than that, though...