Rider8x5
Member Since October 19, 2009
Daniel's Stepmom
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HarleyBuff
HarleyBuff
Pretty simple, and an oversight, I'm sure, Daniel is 9 years old, then goes to play with his friend who refers to Osama Bin Laden some 9 years before most anyone ever heard of the infamous terrorist, and now Daniel is 21 (assuming the story takes place
Freshman Year: My Girlfriend the Slut
by
drakhl
drakhl
Won't even bother to read it if you can't publish it in a readable manner
Thanksgiving at Rob's
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hillarysmuff
hillarysmuff
bother to proof read this??
"Wall of words" was a compliment.
I have no idea if the story is any good at all, I'd didn't bother to read it once I saw the afore mentioned "wall".
Reformat it and you might get some positive feedback.
"Wall of words" was a compliment.
I have no idea if the story is any good at all, I'd didn't bother to read it once I saw the afore mentioned "wall".
Reformat it and you might get some positive feedback.
Me and my Hot Neighbor
by
gabholz
gabholz
at "The door swanged open .............."
Whur dija larn R lan'age??
Whur dija larn R lan'age??
Two Cent Whore
by
Peter_Pan
Peter_Pan
As usual tho, half your critics either missed the point, didn't read any of the Harper Valley series (let alone the critical "continuation") or all of the above (the latter, more likely)
Whether one approves or not of your works, only a fool would den
Whether one approves or not of your works, only a fool would den
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