Mr3Wall
Member Since October 19, 2009
HOME EDUCATION
by
MECCY
4976 days ago
Mr3Wall
5448 days ago
MECCY
4976 days ago
Mr3Wall
5448 days ago
-
0
+
CAPITAL LETTERS RULE! BOLD PRINT RULES! CRAPPY STORIES RULE! THIS STORY BELONGS IN THE POETRY SECTION! IT IS JUST SO BEAUTIFUL! Can you guess I also love SARCASM?
Dev's Vacation - Part One
by
TracesOfInsanity
TracesOfInsanity
Amazing! Someone with a good idea, who can write, and doesn't make grammatical errors every other word? I wasn't sure it was possible on this site. You have written a very good story and I eagerly await part two! Keep up the good work!!!!
blow jobs
by
AliciaM.
AliciaM.
It is easy to tell that this is your first attempt at writing an erotic story, so I will go easy on you. The idea behind your story is fine, but the lack of description makes this less of a story and more of an overveiw. For instance in your story you wri
Danny's birthday
by
Wolflord04
Wolflord04
Very well written and very intriguing subject matter.....more please!
Home Education
by
MECCY
MECCY
HE CAN POST THE SAME STORY TWICE. HE CAN TYPE IN BOLD AND CAPITAL LETTERS. HE IS A MASTER- - NOT OF WRITING BUT OF MAKING PEOPLE WANT TO FIND ANOTHER EROTIC STORIES SITE! I LOVE THIS GUY AND I LOVE HIS STORIES! ALL ONE OF THEM POSTED TWICE!!!!!!!
Look What Aunt Tilley Can Do!
by
lmsyd4u
lmsyd4u
This story just didn't flow and was very hard to read...in fact I only got through the first four or five paragraphs before I found myself skipping ahead to the end....
I think the idea is good, but you obviously wrote this story in a rush. Try slowing
I think the idea is good, but you obviously wrote this story in a rush. Try slowing
Ruby's Best Birthday
by
punkguy
punkguy
The story itself is fine, but I did have a few problems with it...
1. I think everyone knows what a milf is
2. The guy is 32 but you talk about him like he's eighty
3. He gives her a paper shredder for her birthday and she doesn't kill him right
1. I think everyone knows what a milf is
2. The guy is 32 but you talk about him like he's eighty
3. He gives her a paper shredder for her birthday and she doesn't kill him right
The Gane
by
thirdplacesux
thirdplacesux
This is the worst submission I have ever read. I have yet to read someone's story where they couldn't even spell a four-letter title correctly. We as humans have developed this thing called language, and there are certain rules that we try to adhere to so
Chance meeting
by
phllcs40
phllcs40
This story is next to impossible to read with all the grammatical errors. That's not saying that this story would improve any by fixing the grammatical errors. In one word: AWFUL! You have wasted your time and time of anyone who tries to read this story!
School Was For Chumps
by
zoominglemons
zoominglemons
I don't get it! Is this guy gay or just a freaking retard? A hot teacher wants to have sex with him, and he gets scared and runs off? I would have killed to have had sex with a hot teacher at his age, hell I would have killed to have sex with an ugly teac
Schoolgirl
by
Tremor
Tremor
This is a pretty good idea, but it is rushed and lacks details in important places such as the sex scene. Keep at it though, you show promise....
Naughty At School
by
Tremor
Tremor
No doubt that you are already a lot more talented than most of the other writers on this website, but you do need some more practice. Work on writing details, not just about what is happening or what someone looks like, but everything. But don't let me di
Elena
by
LLJOICE3
LLJOICE3
I have to agree with Jay that this story has nothing to do with incest, and I too was pissed off when I got the end and found out that's it. What the hell were you thinking?
My Special Occasion
by
margoslips
margoslips
This story was way too short and offered nothing. I liked the idea but an erotic story should have something erotic about it. One or two sentences to tell about an entire afternoon of sex? Needs work!!!
My Sister and I at the beach
by
Bmember
Bmember
This story was so bad that I don't even feel like talking about it....
Just one thing, I wonder who wasted more time: me when I read this piece of crap or the author when he wrote this piece of crap. (And I'm being nice when I call it "Crap")
YOU SU
Just one thing, I wonder who wasted more time: me when I read this piece of crap or the author when he wrote this piece of crap. (And I'm being nice when I call it "Crap")
YOU SU